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I can use adjectives.
I can use adverbs.
I can use precise nouns.
I can use similes.
This is an olden day Bullock team.
There are ten bullocks pulling a carriage. It has two small wheels at the front and two big wheels at the back, the carriage has brown curtains. The carriage is as big as an elephant.
The Bullocks are black and white. They are big, long, fat and chubby like a hippo.
There is a man with a brown hat making sure the bullocks don't go crazy.
There are steep, long, big mountains in the back ground.
In the olden days bullocks were used as transport.
Zara - Ben you did good adjectives like black and white.
ReplyDeleteMiller - I like how you used similes. I like how you wrote, 'big, long, fat and chubby like a hippo.'
Kyuss - I like how you used precise nouns - curtains.
James - Ben I like how you built a picture in my head.
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Dale - Next time you could describe the carriage in more detail.
Cam - Next time Ben you could do some more adjectives to describe the carriage and the man.
Great work Ben. Very descriptive writing. Awesome like a hippo! - Dad
ReplyDeleteI like the way you described the back ground as well as the carriage. - Mum